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04 January 2009 @ 10:48 pm
Two Minutes. The Finished Version 2/2  


V.

If Dean could just stop fucking touching him for two goddamn minutes, Sam might be able to think again. But Dean doesn't, keeps touching him. Sam doesn't understand it. He understands the need in himself, but not why Dean keeps up the patting on Sam's shoulder, not really pats but more like stroking. Down his back, up, gently tugging his hair. Leaving trails of heat behind when his fingers touch Sam's. Sitting too close on the couch; knees, elbows brushing.

Sam fists his hands, hard enough for his nails to carve half moons in his palms. He wants so desperately to touch his own hand against the spot on his neck where Dean just touched him. Feel if the heat blazing is just in his head or if he really is on fire. He doesn't. Tucks his hands in his lap instead, for the millionth time. Glances at Dean, catches him licking his mouth. A natural thing to do, what is left of their meal still on the table. Take out. Chinese. Tasted of ashes, what little Sam managed to swallow. Catches Dean looking at him again, tongue slowly swiping over his lower lip. Sam finds something extremely interesting to look at outside. Doesn't look again, lets Dean lick his lips in peace.

Dean is flopped on the bed, magazine in one had, remote in the other. Sam sits by the rickety table, laptop starting up. He has his back turned but he can see Dean's reflection in the still black screen. Dean is watching him. Magazine dropped beside him, Dean watches him. There is nothing unusual about this, Sam by the table, Dean on the bed. Lap top. Magazine. But Dean is staring at him, frowning. The screen flairs to life and the reflection is gone.

An hour, maybe an hour and a half. At last Sam finds what he's looking for, and he is stupidly grateful for having to do research. Keeps his mind busy. Keeps his hands busy. He turns towards the bed and finds Dean asleep. He's propped up against the headboard, head lolled to the side, mouth half open. Sam freezes.

Dean looks like a little boy. Innocent in a way he has never had the chance to be. Peaceful. Not like Sam's fitful sleeping. No twitching, no pained sounds, no nightmares. What is there though, is the bulge in Dean's jeans. His right hand rests just next to it, and while Sam looks, the hand moves a little, covers the bulge. Dean does moan then. A soft little sound that goes straight to Sam's already overheated reptile brain, hotwiring to his dick.

He seriously had never though it possible to have a shut down like this. No upper brain functions at all. Just the basic ones. Dean wriggles on the bed, rubs his hand over the bulge, spreads his legs and Sam is gone. Again.

Both hands between his legs. It's worse than it was in the car the day before. Everything is spinning so fast, spinning out off control and Sam has no shot keeping up with it. Dean is barefoot on the bed. His ankles look so delicate without boots on. Sam wonders what it would feel like to touch them. Soft skin, bones. Would it be soft against his lips? Maybe tickle a little if he dared press a kiss there? Gripping tighter, his hands clutch convulsively over the hard ridge he's sporting. Tongue flicking out over his dry lips, and he's up from the chair before he can think. Halfway to the bed before he can stop himself. Dean moans again, fingers mirroring Sam's; squeezing.

Dean's dirty shirt is tossed at the foot of the bed. Sam snags it as he walks by, locks himself in the bathroom. He stands there, leaning against the sink, back to the mirror. He can't stand to see himself, not like this, not when he's going to do this, again.

It hurts every time now. Sam yanks the zipper open, pushes his jeans down just enough. The knock on the door startles him and it takes him a moment to register Dean's sleep-groggy voice.

"Hurry up. Gotta piss." He double taps on the door for emphasis, making Sam almost bite his tongue off.

"Just a sec," he says. "Just gimme two goddamn minutes and I'm out."





VI. Now

"Open the door, Sammy!"

The knocking doesn't stop, Sam has the feeling that Dean really will kick the door in if he doesn't open it. But he can't do that. Not right now. Not yet.

"Two minutes, just gimme two goddamn minutes and I'll be out." Sam forces the words out between clenched teeth.

"You said two minutes five minutes ago and I have to piss! Like right now."

The banging takes up again and Sam can't. He just can't. The head of his dick sticks up between his fingers, red and swollen. It's too dry; he's gripping it too hard. And he can't. Can't come, can't stop the images from flashing, and can't stop the wanting. He buries his face in the T-shirt he's holding, rubs it against his cheeks. And still he can't.

The shirt smells of Dean, sweat and gunpowder, and Sam digs his teeth into it. Muffles his pained groan with it, trying to drown himself in the smell, make it real. Tries to hurry up. The dry sobs go the same way, hidden in the worn fabric. Can't let Dean hear.

Sam tries so hard, but he fails every time. He jacks himself fast and mercilessly, there has never been any pleasure in this, not then and not now, not ever. But the pain, both the burning scrape of his calloused fingers on his flesh and the ripping claws in his chest, makes what he does ok anyway. He's paying for it, with every breath and every move. You always pay your debts.

He doesn't hear the lock snick open, doesn't hear the door being opened. Sam doesn't react until Dean puts his hand on Sam's neck. Then he freezes. Can't move, can't breathe.

"What are you doing, Sam?" Dean's voice is soft. Gentle in a way Sam hasn't heard since he was little and needed hugs because the things under his bed had made terrible noises. Sam can't breathe and he doesn't dare to open his eyes, because he knows what he will see on Dean's face.

But there is no yelling, no disgusted comments, not even a pissy one. Dean takes the shirt from Sam, pulls it away from his cramping fingers. The hand on Sam's neck is still there, strong and gentle, thumb rubbing behind his ear. Pulls Sam's other hand away from his dick. There is no conscious decision that moves Sam's hands to grasp Dean, one hand on his hip, the other one on his shoulder. Sam holds on, fingers gripping the fabric on the verge of tearing it. But when he leans his head on Dean, buries his face in the crook of his neck, he does so because Dean pulls him there.

The thumb keeps rubbing; small soothing circles, and Dean's voice is far away when he speaks. "You're supposed to tell me when there is something wrong, Sam. I'll take care of you." The thumb rubs. "Look at you. All chafed. Hurting yourself, Sammy. Don't do that. Lemme help you instead."

Sam presses his face closer to Dean, opens his mouth over the pulse beating steadily against his lips. Moans. He can't help it, can't keep it in, Dean smells so fucking good, tastes so good. Salt and sweat and sweet. Sam doesn't know what to do anymore, so fucking helpless and he hates it. Dean hums in his ear, rubs his thumb. Puts his hand on Sam's dick.

The fire that ate Jess is nothing in comparison to what Sam feels when Dean holds him. It's eating him in ways not known to mankind. Hot. Soft. Gentle and wet. Dean grips him loosely, barely there. Just holding him.

"You gotta do it, Sammy. Have to show me what you want." Dean's voice is barely above a whisper, but it still echoes in Sam's ears. He grunts and pushes, can't not push. Has to. Still doesn't dare to raise his head and look. Has to feel. Once. He grips Dean's shirt even harder, feels the fabric give a little. Dean doesn't say anything, just holds him a little tighter, gripping a little harder.

Sam keens. Muffling the sounds against Dean's throat, because this is so good he might scream. He pushes into Dean's hand, licks his neck, feels the pulse against his tongue and there is no stopping now. Dean's shirt tears at the shoulder, Sam's fingers clawing the fabric. Stutters his hips, no rhythm, the angle is wrong and for the first time in for ever it's good, so good. No pain. Strong hand, gentle grip, just right.

The pulse under his mouth is speeding up, Dean's panting in his ear. Sam is so close, can feel it kick its way up from the soles of his feet, sizzle in the tips of his fingers.

"C'mon, do it. Show me, Sammy. Wanna see." Dean's lips grazes Sam's ear, tongue flicking out, swiping over his cheekbone. The fingers around his neck tighten when Dean tilts Sam's head, catching his mouth. The hand on Sam's dick slows when Dean runs his tongue over Sam's lips, pushing for entrance. Sam opens. How can he not? Opens for Dean, for whatever he may want. Dean licks his way inside, touching tongue to tongue. The moan is more of a whine this time, but Dean swallows it, fucks his tongue into Sam's mouth again and again, moves his hand faster, meeting Sam's desperate thrusts.

When he comes, it blacks him out a little, making the world go fuzzy on the edges. Sam manages to force his eyes open just before, he has to see, to know what Dean's thinking. Why Dean is doing this. He pulls away from Dean, looks him straight in the eyes, hips moving frantically into Dean's hand.

What he sees sets him off like an avalanche. Dean is staring at him, eyes burning, almost no green left, pupils dilated. It looks like Dean wants, wants this, touching Sam. Cheeks a little flushed, tongue caught between his teeth, pink tip sticking out just so and Sam loses it.

Dean holds him up when Sam's knees give out. Leads him out to the bed and tips him down onto it. Says "I really gotta piss now".

Sam can hear him in the bathroom, groaning with relief when he finally gets to it. "Fucking mayhem trying to piss with a hard on." Sam sniggers, just like that. It's not funny; this is probably the strangest situation he has ever been in. But he can't keep the giggles in. Hysterical much? he thinks to himself but he knows that Dean's hand must be sticky with semen, knows that Dean didn't wipe it off. Thinks of Dean holding his dick with a semen-sticky hand, the giggle turns to a moan.

When Dean comes back from the bathroom, Sam is hard again. Hard and terrified. Hard and still trying to choke back the giggle. But that glare Dean aims at him makes him swallow the bubbly sounds down. He looks down at Sam, eyes unreadable, a hint of the heat still there. Sam feels his throat go dry, the giggles gone in a heartbeat.

Sam's arms are still weak, just as the rest of him, but he struggles up, half sitting. Opens his mouth to apologise, can barely get any sounds out, croaks out something that is meant to be 'sorry' or 'touch me again'.

Dean stares at him. "Shut up, Sammy."


VII. Now.

"I don't…I want…"

"Shut up, Sammy. Just shut up for two goddamn minutes and let me talk, alright?"

He must look like an owl, blinking like that, Sam thinks. He closes his mouth with a snap, though, no talking back to Dean when he has that tone going. Almost like dad's but not, not as hard in the edges. More like 'this is important and you better listen' without the violence lurking behind the syllables. Sam shakes his head, realises that he doesn't make sense even to himself and has to shakes his head again because Dean is frowning. He probably thinks that Sam just said no to him. Sam wouldn't do that, not now anyway.

Sam scoots up the bed, leans back. Damn if he can be bothered to try to wrench his hard dick back in his jeans so he just tugs his shirt down, studiously ignoring the tent that creates. Why should he bother? It's not like this will change anything. Dean is probably standing there; quiet and watching, manning up to tell Sam to take his weirdsicko ass as far away as possible. Dean had just done 'that' because he's nice like that. Always taken care. And being that nice, and having 'take care of your little brother' fucking ingrained in his bones, has made him put his hands on Sam. Kiss him. No other reason. This is where it ends, Sam knows that.

He thinks briefly if he has something he needs to get beside his bag and his laptop, but can't come up with anything. What is left is to listen to Dean laying down the law, bag it up and leave. There is a bus station not far down the road, there has to be a late bus leaving. Sam can do that. Hell, he can do anything to stop Dean looking at him like that, intently. It crawls under his skin, like Dean's steady gaze is picking him apart. And why the fuck isn't he saying anything? Told Sam to shut it and fell silent. Makes Sam all the harder, having Dean looking at him like that.

"No shoes in bed, gets the sheets all dirty." The offhand remark startles Sam out of his thoughts. Looks up at Dean, flinches when he sees Dean still looking at him, his dick twitching where it's hidden under his shirt.

Dean takes a deep breath. 'Here it comes', Sam thinks and sighs in defeat. He looks down at his hands, big clumsy hands, waits for it.

"I know, Sam. I've known for years." Dean's tone is short, clipped. Sam's head jerks up, like being pulled by a string. Did he just hear that? Opens his mouth to say…something, But Dean raises his hand to shut him up, making Sam swallow whatever tried to make its way out.

"Since…for years. Since you lost your baby fat." Dean smiles, a weird, lop-sided grin. "Since you began jerking off and I heard you."

Sam can't breathe, for real this time. There is no chance for air to make its way through his constricted throat. Dean knows. Knows. He bends forward, pulls his knees up, tries to hide. Dean knows. All the time. Hasn't said anything but still he has known. Sam has never wished to be dead as much as he does right now. God, what it must have taken Dean to come get him when he knew how sick Sam is, was, has been. Will never stop being. His head is spinning because he can still not breathe, the giggles working again to break free from his constricted throat.

"I wanted too, Sam." Dean is so close all of a sudden, Sam hadn't heard him move. His hand is back on Sam's neck, breath hot and moist over his cheek. Sam hitches in a breath, gets his lungs working again before he passes out. The fingers move, thumb rubbing calming circles.

"Did you hear, Sammy? I wanted it. All the time. I knew what you were doing and I wanted it too." Dean is hissing the words. "I waited for you to say something, but you never did. And I fucking waited for you. And wanted. Every damn day. With you, always around." He stops, breathing hard.

"I've had it with waiting. I know what you did in the car yesterday. Jerking off. I know how you fuck yourself on your fingers. And man, I can tell you I've been this close to grab you. You never said anything, and then you were gone. So angry and then you left. But now, I'm not gonna wait anymore. Not gonna let you go again." He leans in, tilts Sam's head up, leans his forehead against Sam's, breath hot against his face. "Not losing you again."

"You…knew?" Sam has to ask, stupid but he has to. He tries to get his head around all this, but can only think of his cock still hanging out of his pants. He's soft now, but still, and there is Dean having a heart to heart and Sam's dick is hanging out. Sam feels himself turn beet red, flushing from his hair to his belly, the skin oddly sensitive, as if the blood makes it thinner.

"Yeah, I knew." Dean leans back. "And now I'm done waiting for you. I thought…I thought that you would get around to it before. You were going to touch me, right? When you thought I was asleep." It's not so much of a question, more of a statement, Dean knowing he's right, just looking for the last confirmation.

"This is the only time I'm gonna ask, Sam. You have to make the call, I…can't."

Sam stares at him. It makes an odd kind of sense; Dean not doing anything about it. Of course he can't, he'd never do anything that Sam doesn't want. And he can't be really sure that this is what Sam wants, not until Sam calls it. Properly. Sleeping possum to get Sam to do something, flaunting himself. Trying to hurry things up. Sam wonders briefly what Dean was thinking about, getting hard like that. Feels himself twitch, thinking about Dean thinking about Sam.

But having repressed it for so long, digging it up in the lights, opening the can of worms, feels like having a nail pulled out. Buried too deep for too long.

This can go either of two ways, freak out and run or roll with it. There is something desperate in Dean's eyes; telling Sam that rolling with it is the only way. That, and that he really wants to. He's hard again, from Dean sitting so close, from the look on his face, from the heat Dean is radiating. Like a furnace. Must be that which fries the fuse in Sam's head.

So Sam rolls. Literally. Pins Dean under him, rubs where he can. Dean yelps when he lands on his back with a thud, but then they move together. Easy, knowing. Smooth. As they always do. And Sam knows, just like that, this will be alright. It won't be easy or anything but it'll be alright.

This time when they kiss, Sam starts it. Leans in and bites at Dean's mouth, listens, really listens, to the moan vibrating through Dean when he does so. Licks down Dean's chest, groans at the taste of him, so much better than the shirt. There is the inevitable fumbling, legs tangled, Sam almost knocks Dean in the face with his elbow, but they get it sorted. Clothes off and miles of now naked Dean on top of him, straddling him, legs spread wide around Sam's hips. Sam's hands are trembling when he lets them roam over the pale skin, touches wherever he can. He pushes his lotion-slick fingers inside Dean, feels the heat in there, feels Dean push down, spreading open, fucking himself on Sam's hand. And Dean's hands on Sam, rough and strong, skating over him, slipping in the wet pooling on Sam's belly, smearing it out. Lips on his throat, teeth, Dean likes to bite, not too hard but enough to send forbidden tingles up and down Sam's spine. He's getting marked.

If feels like his heart is beating its way through his ribcage when Dean eases down on him, grunting, rocking. He's mumbling between his teeth, Sam can see the discomfort on his face but Dean doesn't stop. Sits down, Sam all the way inside. Another fuse fries when he sees pain morph to pleasure on Dean's face, sees the flush spreading down his chest. His hands fit so perfectly around Dean's hips, perfect grip to lift him up and shove down. He notices the growling noises, thinks it's Dean at first but it's him, Sam, making them. There is heat and tight and ohsomyfuckinggod good. Dean rides him hard, fast, and there is no chance in hell Sam can last. He lets go with something akin to a howl when Dean squeezes tight and tighter around him, pumping up, in.

Dean sits on him, Sam's softening cock still inside, his own still achingly hard, dripping. He's smiling and Sam can feel his own mouth split into a grin. "Awesome," Dean says. "Awesome but dude, that was fast." The smile is still there though, taking the edge off the words.

Sam blushes, he hasn't lost it this fast in years, prides himself of a little more self-control. "Yeah, well…sorry," he offers.

There is something predatory flashing over Dean's face when he leans close, lets Sam slip from his ass with a wet plop. "Nah,'s ok. My turn now." His grin widens. "Gonna fuck you hard again, gonna make you come so hard."

Sam barely has the time to gasp before he is flipped over on his belly, Dean weighing him down. "Get you wet first, and then Sammy, gonna take you, fuck you so good." Teeth scrape Sam's neck, nips his jugular, sending shivers down his spine and he can't wait, no matter he's not hard yet, just wants Dean inside. He tries to push up on his hand and knees, but Dean has him pinned. Sam's wrist in one hand, holding him down, the other…

He's not new to this, but it has been a while for Sam, he knows it'll hurt but he couldn't care less. Dean's reaching so deep inside, tapping that spot, this time Sam knows the sounds are coming from him. Desperate, high pitched if he could make words he would beg sounds. Dean shoves his legs even wider apart, lies down and covers Sam from head to toe. The first nudge in burns, the slow slipslide all the way inside almost tears him apart. He's gonna feel this for days. And god so good this is too. Dean on him, in him, all over. Hard again. No shame this time, with Dean's hand pushed under his belly, fisting him just right. Letting his thrusts rock Sam into his hand and back on his dick. It's not aching anymore, just that little that makes it all the better.

Dean gnaws at his neck, his shoulders, speeding up. Sam can hear the strain in his moans. He's close and that thought alone has Sam on the edge too. He's so hard again it hurts, spearing his dick the best he can into the tunnel Dean's fist makes for him. Shoving back to meet Dean, feels the hard ridges of hipbones digging into his ass.

"God damn, Sammy, you're good." Dean groans, thrusting deep and short. "So good, Sammy."

Sam knows he should deliver a compliment himself but Dean hits him straight on that spot so speaking is out ruled. The only thing Sam can do, because it's hitting him like a gun shot, is to come. Almost bucking Dean off when his hips jerk up and back, getting Dean deeper, forward into his hand.

Dean makes a noise like it hurts, "Ah god, can't hold it. Gonna fill your ass. So good, Sammy." Dirty words, the image forces another spasm out off Sam, even though he's wrung dry. Sam can feel him swell and spasm inside, fill him up, teeth on his neck.

It's a little awkward after. Untangling, Sam winces when Dean slips free, the sheet is sticky under him, he is sticky. Doesn't know where to look. Now, when it's all over, he still doesn't have his bearings on where this will go.

"Stop freakin' over-thinking again. It's good, we're good. Now drop it and go to sleep." Dean yawns. Pulls Sam close, arm over his chest. "No more hiding now, you hear?" He scoots even closer, kissing Sam on the corner of his mouth and settles with his head on Sam's shoulder.

To his amazement, Sam feels his eyes droop. Can't keep them open, goes to sleep and doesn't dream.

When Sam wakes, hours later, he starts awake, panic flaring. Until his hand connects with warm and solid that huffs irritably. "The hell? Stop hitting me." Dean grumbles and Sam tips over on him. Lands hard, gets more irritated huffing but has to feel, make sure it's real. Feel Dean under him, not going anywhere, that Dean really is real and that Sam isn't dreaming. The ache in his ass is one sign he can't ignore, but he saviours the burn. It says 'Dean was here', made it happen. The thin skin on Dean's throat just under his jaw, is too tempting, Sam has to kiss it. Run his tongue over it, taste. Dean grumbles unintelligibly, but arches his neck to give more Sam more room.

Sam has no idea what time it is, must be late, in the middle of the night, perhaps morning soon. Doesn't matter. Dean is kissing him again, soft and gentle, slipping his tongue in between Sam's lips. Tasting and trying. Swallowing his breath and the low mewling sounds that Sam makes.

Dean fucks him on his back, slow and steady, one hand on Sam's cheek, the other on his hip. It lasts forever and not long enough, Dean doesn't pick up the pace, drives Sam crazy, keeps kissing him. Dean inside him hurts a little, but that has no significance, Dean is so very careful with him, now, this time. There are no loud noises, just the half-whimpered gasps Dean lets out every time he pushes in. Sam wraps his arms around Dean's back, legs around his waist and hangs on. There isn't much else he can do. Nothing else he wants to do. After, when they are done, after Dean's gasped 'Oh god, Sammy!' and Sam's 'Yes, yes, please, come on', they stay like that. Dean with his face in the crook of Sam's neck, Sam's arms and legs still around him.



Fini




Bonus schmoop ending. You might want to be very careful while reading this. It holds so much sugar your teeth might rot.

Sam dreams in the early morning hours. Not about the usual smoke stinking, fire blazing hell but about a street. Looks like any street, neat houses, neat gardens. It's empty though. He walks along the street, trying to figure out what is going on. Then he sees someone sitting on a bench. A woman. She has her back to him but she's so familiar. He speeds up, gets closer. Sees who it is and his chest constricts. Jessica.

He waits for the pain and the sorrow to hit him, tear him apart, but it doesn't come. She turns and looks at him and she is so beautiful. Like before. Smiles at him and waves. When he takes a step forward she puts up her hand to stop him. He stands there, hesitating. She points behind him.

Another familiar figure is standing across the street. Dean. He is waiting for something, someone. Sam can tell from the way he stands that he is getting a little impatient. Sam looks back at Jessica. She is still looking at him, smile on her face. She looks good, content, happy even. She motions for him to walk away and Sam doesn't understand. Not until he turns back again, to Dean. Sees him stand there with his hand outstretched towards Sam. Still waiting. For Sam.

He takes a hesitant step towards Dean. Waits for the guilt to blossom but when it doesn't he takes another step, and another. Stands in front of Dean. Twining their fingers together. Begins to walk. Away. He looks back to Jessica one last time. She's standing, on her way in the other direction. Waves at him again and Sam knows that this is goodbye. He takes a firmer grip of Dean's hand.


Fini. For real this time.



 
 
 
asatomurakiasatomuraki on January 4th, 2009 11:39 pm (UTC)
Oh, my! You broke me. I'm shattered.

*squee*

I'll try to come back later and be helpful.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:06 am (UTC)
You've been plenty helpful! I'm so glad you like the final version.

Thanks muchos!!
thalassa_ipx: SPN - Bottom Samthalassa_ipx on January 4th, 2009 11:48 pm (UTC)
OMG!!!!!!!!!
This is one of the best fics I read in a long time.
The angst that Sam is feeling. Dean looking not caring. I loved it all.
I'll go to sleep with a silly grin on my face.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:07 am (UTC)
My pleasure to put that smile on your face :)Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate them.
lapis1961abx_journal on January 5th, 2009 12:18 am (UTC)
You already know this, but I just loved this fic so much. All of that UST, Dean wanting Sam after all, Sam's angst over his feelings. It was just all so perfect.

You can adopt me anytime - am I even younger than you?


Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:10 am (UTC)
It's totally ok if you repeat yourself :)Think I can live with that.

Hmm, I think you're older than me. But that's alright too. Say sweet things to me and I'm gone.
Thanks again for the help and for the feedback.

::smooch::
Laurenmessengerhatta on January 5th, 2009 12:19 am (UTC)
YESSSSSSSSSS
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:11 am (UTC)
Oh dear. Thank you!
Call Me Psycho Troll!ala_tariel on January 5th, 2009 05:57 am (UTC)
Awwww....you posted the story! So, it's really the complete version? *saves the story*

Thank you.

*hugs you*
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:11 am (UTC)
::hugs back:: Yup, finished. Thank you!
phanie28phanie28 on January 5th, 2009 07:03 am (UTC)
Once again I am in AWE of your writing. That was just too good, I loved the angst, the want, the need and finally the satisfaction. I really enjoyed this, now I'll have nice dreams!!! :D
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 08:30 am (UTC)
I'm more than happy to provide nice dreams. I'm so glad this worked for you.

Thank you so much for your kinds words and feedback!
Larien Elengasselarienelengasse on January 5th, 2009 03:47 pm (UTC)
This was really nice. Poor SAM! And it's so like Dean to just suffer and want in silence like that, waiting for Sam to do something, anything - and so like Sam to over-think it to the extreme. Thanks so much for sharing this!
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 10:45 am (UTC)
I think they suffered in equal parts there, the gents. But it had to be like that, there was no way Dean could start it. Being the protector, he really couldn't initiate something that could possibly hurt Sam.
I'm glad you liked the suffering. Thank you very much for your kind feedback!

Edited at 2009-01-06 10:45 am (UTC)
MacByrnemacbyrne on January 5th, 2009 06:22 pm (UTC)
God that was good; poor Sam's desperation was just heart-breaking, and all the UST was enough to make me sweat! Whew! Awesome ending; love Dean taking care of his Sammy; just great!
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 10:49 am (UTC)
I felt a bit sorry for Sam when I wrote this. But on the other hand; I broke it so I could fix it :)
It's a relief to hear you found that it worked. Thank you very much for your kind feedback!
chemm80: Sweet Sammychemm80 on January 5th, 2009 07:56 pm (UTC)
Really nice portrayal of Sam, broken and hurting after Jessica, even without the UST. Add in that and the resulting guilt? Very powerful. Good job.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 10:58 am (UTC)
Excellent! Great to hear you think 'my' Sam worked out. I was aiming for angst in a plausible way, and trying to avoid too much whine.

Thank you very much for your kind words and feedback!
Elleellel on January 5th, 2009 08:29 pm (UTC)
That was both heartbreaking and so lovely!:)
UST fics are my favorites,but poor Sammy...

Loved iT
:)
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 10:59 am (UTC)
I was aiming for angst but this got a bit out off hand. Sam had a lot more issues than I had expected :)

Thank you very much for your kind words and feedback!
charmedstrange1charmedstrange1 on January 6th, 2009 02:32 am (UTC)
Yay for bonus schmoop ending!! It was just the right amount of sweet at the end-- like dessert. :)

And ohh, the story before the schmoop- so good!! I was afraid it was gonna stay UST and I was gonna be sad for Sammy, so I'm so glad you took it there! And that moment-

"Look at you. All chafed. Hurting yourself, Sammy. Don't do that..."

Awesome. I actually thought, 'Oh, Jesus,' to myself as it was happening. Hee.

Fantastic and hot, love, thanks for sharing.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 11:04 am (UTC)
Yeah, the bonus ending...I hope you still have your teeth left after reading it :)Glad you liked it.

I had in mind to leave Sam hanging, or Dean walking out on him but I couldn't. Not this time anyway. I'll save that for another time.

Thank you very much for reading, your kind words and your feedback!
Call Me Psycho Troll!ala_tariel on January 6th, 2009 05:09 am (UTC)
I've read it! \o/

It's a very wonderful story, smoking HOT though. :)
I'm glad Dean is on the same page as Sam.
And, I can really "see" why you chose the banner, Vesta. I can see Sam hiding "something" he's doing from Dean.
And, ooohhh.... I love the part where Jess gives her blessing to Sam.

<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 6th, 2009 11:36 am (UTC)
Yay!! Hee.
Your picture was so totally perfect, like you had made it just for this. Their faces and their postures; like a glove! Thanks so much for letting me use it.

You didn't go into diabethic coma did you? From the sugary ending. Was a little embarrassing, really. I don't do shcmoop like that normally. But I felt I had to make it up to Sam somehow, after all the misery I put him through.

Thanks muchos again, luv!
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lazy_8s: teddylazy_8s on January 6th, 2009 07:39 pm (UTC)

This was wonderful! I loved Sam's angst and misery at lusting after Dean. And, the steamy climax was brilliant.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 7th, 2009 03:06 pm (UTC)
Ahahaaa! The icon. Love it!

Thank you very much!
glimmerellaglimmerella on January 6th, 2009 11:27 pm (UTC)
*standing ovation* Good stuff. /runs off to brush teeth
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 7th, 2009 03:08 pm (UTC)
::makes a graceful bow::

Thank you very much!! Brush your teeth good now, or they will rot after all that sugar :)
kidosau1412 on January 7th, 2009 10:55 am (UTC)
Wow it's really twist!I love the way Dean watching him and Sam didn't know! XD
Would you write Dean's POV?I just can't stop reading!And the ending is killing me! Good job!(Tears)
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 7th, 2009 03:10 pm (UTC)
Oh, don't cry! It's a happy ending, no need for tears :)
No, this is it. I've done double POV's once and that was enough.
Thank you so very much for your kind words and your feedback!
Camellia Shy: Jared Padalecki -- Summer Sunshinecamellia_bloom on January 7th, 2009 02:12 pm (UTC)
Sam got caught and gets smexed an inch of his life...*faintsdiessqueals* OMFG!!! ♥
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 7th, 2009 03:13 pm (UTC)
Yup, at long last anyway :) Took him long enough though to get his act together.

Thank you very much for your kind words and feedback!
nrrrdy_grrrl on January 7th, 2009 09:21 pm (UTC)
ouch & thanks
You're a torturer. What a great read.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 8th, 2009 01:47 pm (UTC)
Re: ouch & thanks
He! That is the first time I have gotten 'torturer' as a compliment. Cool!
Thank you very much!
Trinitrinipedia on January 7th, 2009 10:49 pm (UTC)
I think this is the most beautiful intake on the beginning of first season that I've read. I loved it so much, you moved me to my core. Thank you.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 8th, 2009 02:05 pm (UTC)
Oh, my goodness, that is great praise. I'm glad I made such an impact with my text.
Thank you so much for your kind words and your feedback!
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mychemfan101mychemfan101 on January 8th, 2009 10:41 am (UTC)
omg this is so good!
i love the angst and the intense feelings sam has. and i love how deans so laid back about it. i just love the whole damn thing lol :)
lmao i cracked up when sam woke up and hit dean in the face! funny :)
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 8th, 2009 02:08 pm (UTC)
Oh. I intended for intense and I'm really glad it comes off like that and not plain old whiny.

Thank you very much for you kind words and feedback.
nightporters on January 8th, 2009 02:14 pm (UTC)
Fantastic fic. Loved every word.
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 8th, 2009 03:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked.
Schnute23: J2 /Manip goldenschnute23 on January 8th, 2009 04:46 pm (UTC)
This.was.so.freakin'.hot.

I ... *DIEZ*
Mae: quill bloodazryal on January 8th, 2009 05:09 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I'm dead, too.
Tremendous work. One of the most sensual and arousing pieces I've read in a long time.

*takes a deep breath*

Okay, back to work. It's gonna be a long afternoon.

Mae

Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 10th, 2009 11:08 am (UTC)
Re: Yeah, I'm dead, too.
Not dead from sugar OD and a too long afternoon, I hope.
I still don't know what to say, though. Aside from that I'm happy you liked it.
Thank you,again, so very much for the feedback.

Edited at 2009-01-10 11:08 am (UTC)
lollipop disease .. ♥: GLURBLE!applepie_x0 on January 8th, 2009 08:59 pm (UTC)
nughgsmgn. SO hot. and the sweet,sweet ending! and dkasdjkjs!! just wow</b>.

<33333333333333333333333333333
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 10th, 2009 11:09 am (UTC)
Ok, try to breathe! Thank you very much,again! I'm so glad you liked it :)
liveinadream87liveinadream87 on January 8th, 2009 09:49 pm (UTC)
That was... INCREDIBLE!!! I love the slow progression and the build-up of tension and heat you've created... the imagery was HOT, like Sam jerking off in the car with Dean not two metres away, and then the sex, where they each fuck the other and stuff (excuse my language)... awesome, totally awesome, thanks for sharing!
Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 10th, 2009 11:12 am (UTC)
Language excused :)
Good to hear it worked. I was a little worried about the text being too 'staccato' and hard to read. But I tried to build tension and that way seemed the best.
Thank you very much for you kind words and your feedback!
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Vesta: vadå?biggelois on January 10th, 2009 11:15 am (UTC)
I was thinking about leaving him hanging, or have Dean walk out on him, but I couldn't. Not this time anyway :)
I've had the same notion, Sam lusting after Dean being a reason for leaving. Great minds think alike ;)
You did brush your teeth, didn't you? After the ending?
Thank you very much for your kinds words and your feedback!

Edited at 2009-01-10 11:15 am (UTC)